We have also been writing about Pukekos.
We noticed that our writing was not very entertaining when we read it, so we thought we would explore ways to make it more entertaining. We came up with the idea of looking at the words we choose to use. Below are some sentences from our poems where we used activated nouns (a fancy way of saying objects that do something.) These make our writing juicier!
Long pointy tail swishes like crazy - Ethan
Long crooked legs run as people walk past - Ella
Bright red eye blink every 3 minutes - Emma
Orange legs are very long with bendy knees - Autumn
Shiny blue feathers sparkle in the sun - Reef
Skinny long legs walk in swamps - Andre
Red eyes look for food - Yasmin
Long fluffy feathers warm in the cold times, like
winter - Piper
Bright red eyes look evil like an evil pukeko - Marie
Pointy beak move forwards and backwards - Tisha
Chopped tail twitches when its itchy - Cam F
Dark blue feathers warm in winter - Ryan
Pukeko feathers are smooth - Byron
Do you like them?
In the comment box can you give us another example?
Hi Room 9
ReplyDeleteWell done Room 9. I can see you have put alot of effort into your sentances to make them interesting. I especially like the pictiure i get of the long crooked legs running and the long pointy tail swishing, lovely :)
ReplyDeleteElla Says - Thank you Charlie. I thought this really described pukeko legs as they run.
ReplyDeleteEthan Says - Thank you Charlie. i wrote this because pukeko walk a bit weird and they swift their bottom from side to side like it is swishing.
Miss Hammond Says. Check Back in soon and you will see some more poems we have written!